In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing,. What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?
Now a days
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Nowadays
people
are reluctant towards their health and fitness that causes increase
in their Add an article
an increase
weight
which inturn
have Correct your spelling
in turn
adverse
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an adverse
affect
on their productivity.in some Replace the word
effect
countries
the average Add a comma
,countries
weight
gain of people
is seen to be increasing day by day.
There are many reasons for increasing
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the increasing
an increasing
weight
of people
such
as sedantary
lifestyle,stressful work and eating lots of junk foods.due to fast pace life and highly stressful jobs Correct your spelling
sedentary
people
donot
get time to exercise.They spend more time Correct your spelling
do not
don't
in
gadgets and social media so Change preposition
on
basically
they are becoming couch Add a comma
,basically
potato
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potatoes
now a days
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nowadays
that
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which
decreases
their body metabolism and Wrong verb form
decreasing
increases
their Wrong verb form
increasing
weight
drastically.
childhood obesity is also
a result of less physical activity in Correct your spelling
children
children's
childrens
.they avoid outdoor games and indulge more in mobile games and Correct your spelling
children
in
laptops.
Another reason for Change preposition
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increase
in Add an article
the increase
an increase
weight
gain is unhealthy eating like going to restaurants frequently and having fast food instead
of freshly home cooked
food.
In order to avoid frequent Add a hyphen
home-cooked
weight
gain and to remain fit and healthy people
should adopt healthy
lifestyle. They should prefer walking or riding Add an article
a healthy
bicycle
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a bicycle
instead
of using cars and bikes. People
should include physical activities like runing
, swimming, yoga and meditations in their daily routine and indulge in outdoor sports like cricket, badminton etc.
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running
People
should prepare their own food at home with fresh vegetables and include more healthy foods in their diet.
On
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In
concluding
I would like to reiterate that health is the most important asset and one should Replace the word
conclusion
chnage
their lifestyle and eating habits in order to have Correct your spelling
change
normal
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a normal
weight
which is very important to prevent diseases like diabetes, hypertension and other heart ailments. Good health of people
is very important for growth
of societies and country too.Add an article
the growth
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