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in some countries it is thought advisable that children begin formal education at four years old, while in others they do not have to start school until they are seven or eight. how far do you agree with either of these views?

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Education
 is the key to success and getting educated is the basic right of the
child
.
Therefore
, some people argue that
children
 should send to schools at the
age
 of
four
 but few others opine
this
 and say that seven or eight years are the right
age
to begin
 formal
education
 for
children
.
However
, I strongly disagree with the latter opinion.
To begin
 with, the
child
's brain is like a blank paper so, whatever write at
first
 will
last
 forever. To be precise, three to
four
 years
children
 will begin to learn at
this
age
 and they will be curious to explore new
things
also
.
Hence
this
 is the right
age
 to start formal
education
 for
children
.
For instance
, nowadays many
children
 at the
age
 of three or
four
 are easily learning many
things
 and putting their signature in world records like Limca book of world record. To summarize, it is easy for the
child
 to learn and memorize
things
 at
this
age
. To continue with, learning new
things
 at an early
age
 will help the
child
 to be more independent when he grows
moreover
,
this
 is even necessary to survive in the competitive world.
For example
, if a
child
 starts his formal
education
 at the
age
 of seven or eight will be less competitive than a
child
, who starts his
education
 at the
age
 of
four
additionally
, the
child
also
 feels lazy to study the subjects
moreover
, in future he
also
 feels guilty for wasting many years idle.
Finally
, starting schools at an early
age
 will bring many benefits to
children
 in future
moreover
,
this
also
 makes learning easy to
children
.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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