Nowadays online shopping has become more popular, while some people argue in-store shopping would be better. To what extent do you agree?

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In our culture, now anyone can buy anything through the internet and it became more popular,
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some argue that shopping at the store is much better. I totally agree with
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, and I am going to write some main points why buying items at the store is more convenient. Throughout the years, purchasing whatever you need with our devices it became really common.
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pepole
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scam buyers with fake
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why the shopping made in-store is much better.
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with
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, people at the shops can actually verify that the product fit them and
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they can make sure
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the same material as the one
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thing for the price.
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. The purchase of items at the stores can help to support your local stores. Even though people live far away from the shops and think it is better
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stuff online ,
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they should support their local stores. When supporting them,
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make them grow bigger and always get the top goods. So buyers are able to have those items where nobody can find anywhere else.
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will be a safe and specific way to buy what you
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will increase even more, but that
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mean that it will be
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safest way to do it. In my opinion, I feel if I want a specific good, I will always go into the store, make sure it is what I wanted and it is made right for me rather than buying it online where I won't know if it will be the same thing.
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