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Nowadays online shopping has become more popular, while some people argue in-store shopping would be better. To what extent do you agree?

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In our culture, now anyone can buy anything through the internet and it became more popular,
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 some argue that shopping at the store is much better. I totally agree with
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, and I am going to write some main points why buying items at the store is more convenient. Throughout the years, purchasing whatever you need with our devices it became really common.
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pepole
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people
 scam buyers with fake
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products
 or not the same as advertised,
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 why the shopping made in-store is much better.
For example
 with
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clothing
, people at the shops can actually verify that the product fit them and
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 they can make sure
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 the same material as the one
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 the advertisement, and
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 thing for the price.
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. The purchase of items at the stores can help to support your local stores. Even though people live far away from the shops and think it is better
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 stuff online ,
instead
 they should support their local stores. When supporting them,
also
 make them grow bigger and always get the top goods. So buyers are able to have those items where nobody can find anywhere else.
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 will be a safe and specific way to buy what you
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need
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. In conclusion, the way to buy
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products
 online
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will increase even more, but that
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 mean that it will be
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safest way to do it. In my opinion, I feel if I want a specific good, I will always go into the store, make sure it is what I wanted and it is made right for me rather than buying it online where I won't know if it will be the same thing.
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