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Some people prefer full-time jobs because they offer stability. Other people prefer casual jobs because of the freedom they offer. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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The choice to choose what form of
employement
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employment
 to take
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 has always been at the hands of every individual
for instance
 full-time
jobs
 or casual
jobs
, depending on the pleasure they derive from taking
such
employement
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employment
.
This
 essay will be
dicussing
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discussing
 why
people
 prefer casual
jobs
 or full-time
jobs
 and
also
 state my
opinoin
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opinion
 on the subject. Full-time
jobs
 offer stability and steady income some
people
 say, while for some it gives them a purpose to be busy each day.
On the other hand
, some
people
 feel having a full-time job doesn't allow enough time to socialize or have quality time with their family. Whereas, some
people
 prefer casual
jobs
 because it offers them
freedom
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 to engage in other activities they enjoy. On the flip side, some
people
 feel having a casual job doesn't offer them enough hours each week, or they are not making enough wages to pay
there
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 bills. In my
opinoin
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opinion
, making a decision to take a type of
employement
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employment
 should be solely based on how you intend to live your life,
for instance
 wanting to have a stable job so as to have
purpose
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a purpose
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 each day or just because you want to have a stable income to provide for your needs, or you just want to have the freedom to do other things that interests you.
This
 can be
acheived
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achieved
 by proper
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planing
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 and deep consideration for what you are willing to
sacrifise
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sacrifice
 to get what you want. In conclusion, both full-time
jobs
 and casual
jobs
 both have
there
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 advantages and disadvantages. What matters most is
choosen
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choosing
choose
chosen
 the best form of employment that suits your
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lifestyle
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life style
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lifestyle
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 in other to feel fulfilled in what you do.
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