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1.Universities and colleges are now offering qualifications through distance leaning from the internet than teachers in the classroom. Do you think the advantages of development outgoing the disadvantages?

#universities #colleges #qualifications #distance #internet #teachers #classroom #development
Nowadays，many universities and colleges did not allow that
students
 learn in school due to the COVID-19.
Therefore
, the qualifications are given to
students
 through
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distance
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leaning
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instead
 of teaching in the classroom. I think the advantages of
development
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 outweigh the disadvantages. Some people believe that
students
 could not master the skills and knowledge due to no teacher to monitor them to learn and distance
education
 cannot create
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, which will cause that their grades were very poor.
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,
students
 who lived in their own home might
cannot
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 communicate with classmates and friends face to
face
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 resulting
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 relationships would become weak and not in close touch. Despite the disadvantages mentioned above, I think there are two main reasons why some people would think the merits outweigh defects.
Firstly
,
students
 in universities did not be worried about where they learn and their living fees .
For example
, the international
students
, if they could get the diplomas via the
education
 online and
this
mean
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 that they could live in their comfortable house and save the
amount
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 of costs from
accommodation
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.
secondly
,
online
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education
, it is easy to commute directly to tutors and teachers to talk about the academic questions and doubts,
also
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 easy to allocate and select. These could enhance effects from the studying and teaching. I think remote
education
 could give
the
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equal right to some
students
 that came from
the
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poverty areas to make them
to
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acquire knowledge. In conclusion, for all reasons above, I think we gain more from learning on the Internet than we lose.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unparalleled flexibility
  • democratizes education
  • geographically isolated
  • personal circumstances
  • cost-effectiveness
  • accommodation
  • commuting
  • self-motivated learning
  • self-discipline
  • time management
  • direct interaction
  • feelings of isolation
  • quality and recognition
  • inferior
  • technical issues
  • digital divide
  • reliable technology
  • underprivileged
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