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Nations should spend more money on skills and vocational training for practical work, rather than on university education. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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While some countries invest millions of dollars in their tertiary
education
 systems, I am positive that they should put more effort into setting up vocational schools throughout their countries. Establishing a vocational
education
 system will increase the country's employment rate and at the same time, reduce poverty across the nation. Equipping
people
 with skills to go into the workforce helps in bringing up the employment rate.
People
 could pick up a new skill in a shorter time compared to earning a 3-year university degree and
thus
, they can start working quickly.
Additionally
, it is through experience that
people
 learn and improve. While higher
education
 usually teaches students with theories, it does not give them the industrial experience that they need to immediately start working after graduation. Countries that allow
people
 to opt for vocational
education
 have a lower population of impoverished families. The key reason for
education
 is to enable
people
 to earn money. Skills training centres let
people
 quickly learn the skills that are necessary to go into the workforce and start earning a salary. If more
people
 have the opportunity to go
this
 route
instead
 of a degree, they can start supporting their families monthly.
For example
, a lot of
people
 in my country cannot afford to go to university and
as a result
, they end up working as blue-collar workers and they earn less than ten dollars per day. In conclusion, government officials should consider establishing more vocational schools that allow
people
 of all ages and different financial backgrounds to attend to increase the country's employment rate, as well as bring down poverty.
This
 will definitely contribute to the nation's growth.
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