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Although most people are much richer than in the past, modern life seems very stressful, and the number of people suffering from stress is at record levels. What are the main causes of the stress of the modern life , how could stress be reduced?

#people #life #stress #record #levels
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These days, due to social development,
people
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 have a better
life
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 than before.
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, the proportion of
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 facing
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 high levels.
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 , it is important to identify its cause and propose timely solutions to
stress
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 issues.
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problem
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 can be attributable to some reason. One of the major issues related to
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 is that there are many new problems in human
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Government
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 has boosted the economy by building dramatically up Industrial parks. It means that
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 have less land to live
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 before.
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 the cost of renting increased by 20 % in 2010 and 27% of
people
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 in the world were homeless. The cost
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 living is so expensive that many
people
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 can afford it. They might be confused about accepting bad situations or trying to improve them, which causes
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. Another alarming
problem
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 is that
people
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 are more likely to have a virtual
life
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. Social networks like Facebook,
tiktok
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TikTok
 are widely used. Somebody could seriously care about what
people
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 think about them. They might be stressed because their real
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 is not as good as the "
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". Viet Nam is in
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people
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 using " social network in the world, and 89% of adults are stressed by bad comments on social media.
People
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's mental health can be affected. There are a number of viable measures to address
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problem
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. One solution to it is for government to have a
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 strategy to solve residents' problems. House
price
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 can be discounted or free far in each period for new famílies or elders. Inhabitants can be comfortable
to work
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 and enjoy
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 without worrying about not having a house when they are older. Another possible solution to
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 issue would be for
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 to have
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 lifestyle. We can do yoga before going to bed or even just fold a blanket when
me
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 get up. It can make us relax and have more energy. In conclusion,
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stress
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 is a
problem
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 for a lot of
people
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, there are a number of viable solutions to counteract
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Economic pressure
  • Cost of living
  • Financial strain
  • Workload
  • Job insecurity
  • Gig economy
  • Technology
  • Information overload
  • Social isolation
  • Digitally connected
  • Competitive world
  • High expectations
  • Societal expectations
  • Work-life balance
  • Relax and recharge
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