Our personalities are predetermined as a result of our genes before we are born and there is nothing that can be done to change our character traits. To what extent do you agree?

Person character is set
as a result
of the people genes and their traits can not be changed.
However
, to some
extent
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I agree with
this
statement. Following that,
the
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human intelligence
is wholly consist
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from
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the
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ancestor actions.
First
of all, people are frequently have similar traits as their parents. In fact, regarding even common things
such
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appearance, style or
behaivor
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behaviour
. Because if parents have blue eyes,
then
children will obviously get the same
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.
For instance
, my father has black hair
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and my mother is got the same.
Then
, when I was born I
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also
dark hair shade respectively.
Hence
, often parents have
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influence on people
appearence
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appearance
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career
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • predetermined
  • character traits
  • genetic influence
  • environmental factors
  • personality development
  • upbringing
  • foundation
  • evolution of traits
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