In many countries, school have severe problems with student behavior. What do you think are causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?

The Covid 19 pandemic is a problem for all of humanity, it not only affects people's daily lives but
also
causes other activities to be suspended or halted. Similar to education in Vietnam, universities are required to accept
students
to study online
instead
of having to go to
campus
as usual and it makes a difference in
students
' daily lives.
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understanding of the matter. Online learning brings more comfort to
students
instead
of going to
school
. If
students
can study online at home, they will have more
time
to sleep in the morning.
Teachers
will teach
students
who always wake up late when studying online.
Students
will not need to spend
time
commuting from home to
school
and
moreover
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they can wear the most comfortable clothes when studying online.
This
brings a positive side that
students
can absorb the lesson better when they are completely comfortable. It helps
students
easily absorb the lecture and understand the knowledge quickly. From those impacts, online learning can partly help many
students
improve their learning results in a better and more effective way.
Moreover
, online learning helps
students
to be more active in the lesson than studying at
school
. Many
students
, when they attend
school
, don't understand
lessons
, they choose either quiet or ask friends
instead
of asking
teachers
.
However
, when learning online,
students
are often
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in talking directly with
teachers
about the
lessons
they are having problems with. Being more active in the
lessons
helps both
teachers
and
students
impart knowledge in the best way, thereby bringing more effective results than expected.
However
, face-to-face learning at
school
brings many other positive aspects compared to online learning. It can be said that it is the communication ability of
students
. Online learning is almost a conversation between an individual student and a teacher. They do not have
time
for communication and exchange with each other. But
this
can be done at the
school
campus
.
Students
can meet each other anywhere or at any
time
and communicate with each other in the
school
.
This
is to develop
students'
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communication skills and
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with people. Obviously, it is not possible to develop
such
a skill through online learning.
On the other hand
, studying on
campus
helps
teachers
better understand their
students
because they can observe
students
during
lessons
.
Teachers
can see which
students
are having problems with their subjects if they are taught on
campus
instead
of online. The benefit of
this
aspect is very good when
teachers
can help
students
overcome
lack
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of knowledge in the subject or problems related to the lecture. In conclusion, studying online or studying on
campus
has both positive and negative aspects.
However
, during the epidemic, people should adapt to online methods because they may have to use them for a long
time
.
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