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In many countries, school have severe problems with student behavior. What do you think are causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?

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The Covid 19 pandemic is a problem for all of humanity, it not only affects people's daily lives but
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 causes other activities to be suspended or halted. Similar to education in Vietnam, universities are required to accept
students
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 to study online
instead
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 of having to go to
campus
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 as usual and it makes a difference in
students
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' daily lives.
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 few differences will be highlighted for
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a better
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 understanding of the matter. Online learning brings more comfort to
students
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instead
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 of going to
school
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. If
students
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 can study online at home, they will have more
time
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 to sleep in the morning.
Teachers
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 will teach
students
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 who always wake up late when studying online.
Students
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 will not need to spend
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 commuting from home to
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 and
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 they can wear the most comfortable clothes when studying online.
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 brings a positive side that
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 can absorb the lesson better when they are completely comfortable. It helps
students
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 easily absorb the lecture and understand the knowledge quickly. From those impacts, online learning can partly help many
students
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 improve their learning results in a better and more effective way.
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, online learning helps
students
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 to be more active in the lesson than studying at
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. Many
students
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, when they attend
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, don't understand
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, they choose either quiet or ask friends
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 of asking
teachers
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.
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, when learning online,
students
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 are often
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 in talking directly with
teachers
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 about the
lessons
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 they are having problems with. Being more active in the
lessons
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 helps both
teachers
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 and
students
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 impart knowledge in the best way, thereby bringing more effective results than expected.
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, face-to-face learning at
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 brings many other positive aspects compared to online learning. It can be said that it is the communication ability of
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. Online learning is almost a conversation between an individual student and a teacher. They do not have
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 for communication and exchange with each other. But
this
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 can be done at the
school
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campus
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.
Students
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 can meet each other anywhere or at any
time
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 and communicate with each other in the
school
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.
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 is to develop
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students'
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 communication skills and
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 with people. Obviously, it is not possible to develop
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 a skill through online learning.
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, studying on
campus
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 helps
teachers
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 better understand their
students
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 because they can observe
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 during
lessons
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.
Teachers
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 can see which
students
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 are having problems with their subjects if they are taught on
campus
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instead
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 of online. The benefit of
this
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 aspect is very good when
teachers
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 can help
students
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 overcome
lack
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a lack
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 of knowledge in the subject or problems related to the lecture. In conclusion, studying online or studying on
campus
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 has both positive and negative aspects.
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, during the epidemic, people should adapt to online methods because they may have to use them for a long
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.
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