Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion
Nowadays, it is argued that advertising does a great job of pushing
people
to purchase things while
others are of the view of how common it has become, it no longer has an impact of persuading anyone to buy anything because people
ignore the adverts
. This
essay will discuss the two views, and, in my opinion, I think that it may not have as much impact as it should, but some people
are still persuaded by it.
On the one hand, advertising still persuades some people
to purchase things. There are many types of advertising styles that are used to attract people
to buy. These are the internet, newspapers and magazines, radios
and television, shows etc. It all depends on how advertising is done, and the brands used. Fix the agreement mistake
radio
For example
, a compassionate businessman was never into buying chocolates, but the motive of one sweet company doing their advertises of
chocolate, caught his attention. All the money collected for the event was given to charity, and Change preposition
for
this
businessman's heart and thereafter
, he began to buy chocolates always for his family.
On the other hand
, advertising has been made to be common and, in the end, less or no attention is paid towards it. This
is mainly because everyone is advertising anything and everything on all platforms. Further
, the same adverts
appear too much and because of that, they end up boring. Furthermore
, some adverts
just pop up anytime in people
's laptops and this
can also
be irritating to other people
. In addition
, people
end up not paying any attention to them. Thus
. it should be noted that too much of anything is not good and people
term it, ‘common' and ignore same.
In conclusion, when people
advertise, individuals are led to purchase items conversely
advertisements are perceived as common and are no longer considered. In my opinion, I believe some adverts
push individuals to buy while
others are too much advertised and hence
, they are ignored because of too much advertising.Submitted by pncubeterera on
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