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With the widespread use of the Internet, more people choose to work or study from home. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?

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Technology has made our lives easier, faster and more comfortable.
Consequently
, it is not unusual for some people to work or study from
home
. As far as the lifestyle and the cost are concerned, I personally think it is a positive development,
although
 it always needs strong self-discipline
ability
 and sometimes they may feel lonely. Working or studying from
home
 can benefit
employees
 and
students
 by saving
time
 and money on transport. As getting rid of commuting
time
 and the annoying transport congestions, people could have more
time
 to concentrate on their daily tasks.
For instance
, it is difficult to conceive that
students
 do some English listening on a noisy bus in the morning when they have the most energy, but now, studying from
home
 enables
students
 to make the most of the mornings’ moments. Another benefit of working or studying from
home
 is that it is conducive for people to have healthy lifestyles. Most
employees
 and
students
 have to get up early to catch the subway or school bus. If they want to prolong their sleeping
time
, they will usually sacrifice their breakfasts.
By comparison
, they could eat breakfasts regular to lift their profile and these small lifestyle changes could make a huge difference in the long run. The downside of working or studying from
home
 is that your working efficiency is dramatically related to one’s self-control
ability
. Individuals who have poor self-discipline
ability
 usually tap into low work efficiency. Simultaneously, spending too much
time
 working at
home
 can make
employees
 feel isolated and distance learning
students
 do not have face-to-face interaction with their classmates which may make
students
 feel lonely. In conclusion, I believe that working or studying from
home
 has a beneficial effect on
employees
 and
students
although
 it needs strong self-discipline
ability
 and may cause lonely emotions.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • work-life balance
  • flexible schedule
  • commuting
  • carbon emissions
  • productivity
  • distractions
  • isolation
  • collaboration
  • remote communication
  • overworking
  • burnout
  • self-discipline
  • self-motivation
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