You are temporarily moving to a new city for your job. You will be there for three months, and you would like to rent some accommodation for your stay. Write to an accommodation rental office. In your letter •Tell them how long you are staying •Describe the type of accommodation you would like •Explain what facilities you will need nearby You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing
this
letter to ask you about looking for accommodation in Riyadh city. I am going to stay in Riyadh next month from the beginning of August till October which is three months
due to
my job. during that time I would like to have a small apartment including a bedroom, a kitchen when I back from work I have to cook for myself, and
finally
a bathroom. My work is located near the metro station which means I want to stay near the metro station
due to
I don’t have a driver's license
moreover
, in Riyadh there is traffic
therefore
, I prefer to go to work by metro.
Also
if you can look for me an apartment near a supermarket, cafe, and library to study in a library it would be suitable for me. I am looking
to
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forward to
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hearing from you. Yours sincerely, Alex.
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coherence cohesion
While the overall structure is present, the letter could benefit from clearer paragraphing. Each paragraph should center around a single idea for improved coherence.
task achievement
Consider using a more formal tone in the greeting and closing. For example, 'I am looking forward to hearing from you' is more appropriate than 'I am looking to hearing from you'. Also, 'Yours sincerely' is correctly followed by a comma.
task achievement
Elaborate on each point with more detail to fully meet the task requirements, such as specifying the type of apartment and the importance of the requested facilities in proximity to the accommodation.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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