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In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

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While the agricultural industry experienced a considerable improvement, many nations around the world suffer from
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 shortages. There are several factors which to account for these circumstances, but policies can be implemented to encourage civilians to farm local organic
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. In many countries, there are various reasons why industrial agriculture could not resolve the issue of global hunger.
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, geographic difficulties play a crucial role in the distribution of eatable items.
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, The majority of the population who endure
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 hardships reside in inaccessible areas that make
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 transportation too costly for individuals to effort.
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, overconsumption of developed nations leads to unfair admeasurement in eatable products worldwide, especially in luxurious forms.
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, seasonal farming is another reason for lacking enough
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 for some people. Seasonal farming entirely relies on the amount of rain in specific periods. It can cause some horrible disasters if a long-term drought occurs. It is possible that taking some essential steps by authorities in establishing organic farming as a standard method in
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 production will be helpful.
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 of all, organic farming reduces production costs significantly.
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, applying
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 method eradicates expenses of conventional agriculture
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 as chemical fertilizers and pesticides. Another game-changing result could be to increase the variety of
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 produced by local growers, eliminating the need to import those foods from other countries.
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 would reduce the environmental means of transportation expenditure that could protect civilians of that area from hunger danger for a long period. In conclusion,
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 there are some obvious reasons for global
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 famine, organic farming should be adopted by local
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 growers to meet
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 challenge.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inequality
  • distribution
  • access to resources
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • political factors
  • economic factors
  • agricultural practices
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • population growth
  • education
  • knowledge
  • food waste
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