Some people are of the opinion that children should be rewarded for good behaviour.others think they should be punished for bad behaviour.Discuss both views and give your personal opinion and reasons.

Many individuals claim that toddlers need to be honoured for exemplary deeds while other schools of thought
also
argue that they should be brought to book for bad virtues.From my point of ,view young ones should be awarded for good deeds because it will motivate them and improve the general
community
behaviour norm. The provision of awards has
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impact on
children
well-being.
Firstly
,if a child is honoured it makes them feel good and the urge to continue doing good is aroused.
Moreover
,they will proceed to have exemplary virtues in order to acquire many gifts of honour.
Secondly
,good morals among
children
promote
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positive energy in the
community
. To illustrate
this
, many youths will have a good discipline that will promote peaceful
community
existence owing to the fact that a reward is guaranteed at the end of the day.
For instance
,
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recent research revealed that
children
performed well upon being promised a reward from their teachers.
Thus
,recognising
children
abilities is vital not only in shaping their characters but
also
in promoting peaceful co-existence in the
community
.
On the other hand
,owfull
behaviours
should be penalised.The provision of penalties helps not only helps in shaping
the
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future
behaviours
but
also
in deterring the possible repeat of certain
behaviours
.Research has found that
children
who are being brought to book because of their bad behaviour have limited chances of repeating the issue again.
Moreover
,punishment is meant for "correction not hate" according to the certain adage.
Furthermore
,punishment will help instil good virtues in
children
.
For example
,
children
are brought to
the
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juvenile institutions with the aim of improving their moral behaviour.
Therefore
,teaching toddlers a lesson have a positive impact
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their lives. To conclude,giving rewards to
children
will help promote good morals in them as well as providing equivalent punishment towards bad
behaviours
will
also
promote a healthy moral virtue.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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