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The Internet has made a positive impact on our life. Do you agree or disagree?

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In today's modern era, nobody can imagine life without the
internet
. The
internet
 totally changed our lifestyle. All humans are dependent on computers.
This
 makes our life easier. I am partially agreed
to
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 the given notion. In my perspective, it has more advantages
then
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than
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 disadvantages. In the following, paragraphs we will discuss in detail. At the
first
 glance, through social
sites
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 everyone feels connected. To explain it, the majority of people have their own social
account
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accounts
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 where they can upload their daily routine tasks
such
 as images or videos.
For example
, if someone is living abroad, he or she can talk to their parents through video calls on Whatsapp or via other applications.
Thus
, they feel they are talking with them
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face to face.
In addition
 to it, the
internet
 is a great source of knowledge. To illustrate it, students can find study materials by surfing the
internet
 at any time or from any corner of the world.
Furthermore
, it provides not only
information
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it is
also
 very useful for entertainment like, playing video games or watching movies or doing shopping.
Although
 having beneficial factors, it
also
 has some demerits.
Firstly
, adults and children are using it all day as they
addicted
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 to it. Which is not good for their health.
Moreover
, no doubt they learn many things from the
internet
 but from the long ,use they develop health issues i.e. obesity, weak eyesight and slow brain and so on. Another most important negative point is false
information
. Sometimes, users put wrong
information
 on
internet
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 that may cause fraud or
misleading
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 to others. In conclusion, the
internet
 is a wider platform where you can find any
information
, play games, video calls, online shopping or chat at very low rates. But be careful of false
information
 and parents should limit the time for their children and keep an eye on their search history to avoid any loss.
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