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In many parts of the world there is continuous coverage of sport on television. Some people believe this discourages the young from taking part in any sport themselves. Discuss the view and give your own opinion.

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According to the development of science, every other field in the world is developing as well. Especially, the media branch is eagerly expanding. Due to the development, the
television
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 channels are presenting certain fields all day. In
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 essay, I shall draw upon a number of cognitive studies that reveal the positive and negative aspects of the non-stop presenting of sport on
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 for the younger generations. The most common disadvantage,
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 known to
people
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, about
sports
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 channels is, it decreases the motivation to play
sports
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 as the desire is satisfied by watching. According to the study, humans have mirror neurons in our brain, which gives us the opportunity to have empathy,
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,
people
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 can sense the same feeling as playing
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, just by watching it. The other disadvantage might include it encourages online betting on
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.
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, it is our choice to whether to step foot on the betting or not, but if one starts to win a certain amount of money, it is easy to get addicted.
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, some studies exposed the advantages of continuous presentation of
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 on
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. Through the
sports
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 program,
people
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 can learn new skills, especially the younger brains can't get enough of the new knowledge.
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, it will motivate them to use the new skill on the field. To conclude, the non-stop presentation of sport on
television
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 can have both negative and positive effects on
people
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.
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, the disadvantages that demotivate younger generations playing sport by themselves are not the big impact.
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, it encourages them to play even harder, it motivates them to play it on the field and feel it by themselves.

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