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Would you prefer to go on a long trip by car or by train?

These days, transportation is one of the most important factors in parts of people's lives. If a question about
choice
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the choice
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 between
car
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 or
train
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 is addressed, it will be challenging for us to reach our decision on
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 controversial issue. In my opinion,
benefits
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 of travelling by
car
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 outweigh its disadvantage and the reason to support arguments will be covered in
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 essay The
first
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 reason is
time
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. It is flexible. You can manage
time
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 by yourself. From my personal experience, I went to Rayong by
car
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 because I prefer to stop by
at
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my hometown to travel
at
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to
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 Pattaya
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.
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, I can wake up late around ten o’clock but if I went by
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, I had to wake up early because I need to get on
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train
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the train
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 on
time
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 around seven o'clock. As the result, travelling by
car
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 make you have flexible
time
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 to travel The
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 reason is health. Travelling by
car
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 make you have
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 area, small group and can prevent covid-19. According to local university research, more people can infect with covid-19 by travelling by
train
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 than by
car
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, around 70%. because in the
train
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, there are no separate zone and cleaning. In the
while
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whole
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time
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, in the
car
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, you can travel in
small
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 group, and it is not
tightly
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.
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 travelling by
car
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 will not make you get backache because seats in
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car
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the car
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 are more comfortable than
in
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on
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 the
train
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. In conclusion, travelling by
car
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 is the best choice for me because it is
flexible
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time
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. I can manage
time
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 to plan
trip
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 easier than travelling by
train
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 and can have
a
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good health by preventing covid-19 situation and
have
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the
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comfortable seats.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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