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Some people say it’s a waste of time when plan for future. It is more important to focus on present. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #it’s #waste #time #plan #future #focus
In
this
 world, everyone is dreaming
for
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 something to achieve. Some of them make plans years ahead and
rest
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 of them just
enjoying
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 the present. There is
a
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 ongoing debate on planning for forthcoming or
enjoy
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 the present. I firmly agree that people should enjoy the current
time
. In the following paragraph,
i
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 will explain my point of view. At the
first
 glance, people who pay attention to the existing
time
 are happier than those who do not. They said that we could not predict our future.
Therefore
, it is a waste of
time
 for us to keep thinking about our future. So we only have to concentrate on what we do now and do our best to achieve the goal.
For example
, my best friend is always panicking about our exam results and always in tension about our studies.
Thus
, he
become
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 ill. As his mental health is not good. He has to visit
physiological
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 ward every month.
Furthermore
, humans who are happy and
feeling
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 the vibes are more likely to be successful than others. Concerning too much about the future would not enable us to concentrate well on what we are doing right now.
For instance
, nowadays, my sister spends most of her
time
 planning to study abroad. She kept searching more about universities in England until late at night every day. Having not enough
time
 to sleep, she is always sleepy in
classroom
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.
As a result
, her grades dramatically falls
this
 semester. In conclusion, we do not have to waste our
time
 on forthcoming
instead
 of that we have
focus
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a focus
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 on or present for
better
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a better
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 life .
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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

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