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1. In some cultures old age is more valued, while in other cultures youth is more valued. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#cultures #age #youth
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It is argued that in some
nations
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' beliefs, mature
people
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 are precious but,
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, others believe that young adults are worthy.
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 essay agrees that the old
generation
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 has a higher place of respect. on one hand, in many cultures old
people
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 are treated more respectfully and more worthy because of their values for communities. Mature
people
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 not only have abundant experiences about life and ways of living in a great manner but
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 they are representing the society historical backgrounds to other
nations
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. It is
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 agreed that grandparents can transfer their valuable experiences to youngsters which are useful for their future to not get into possible future pitfalls.
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, Iran is one of the
countries
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 around the world where young adults are trying to imitate their grandparents in every area of their life because they believe that the old
generation
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's advice would help them to follow the success path constantly.
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, other
nations
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 have been investing in the young
generation
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. the vast majority of developed
countries
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 have been looking into some ways for their own improvement in every area which has profit for them, so, they will pay much more attention to youth assets rather than mature ones. Abandoning the previous generations for reaching high profit is not only acceptable morally but
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 those
people
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 could work along with younger ones at same quality.
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, in Turkey, most carpenters are more than 58 years old because
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 type of work is not one of the jobs that most
people
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 will be master in a short period of time. in conclusion, it is always a battle between the
countries
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 where matures are considered as a valuable asset and
countries
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 where youth
people
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 are the most precious ones.
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 young generations are vital for the future of
countries
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, old
generation
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 with their plentiful experiences will always have more benefits for
nations
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.
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