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Many people use social media every day to get in touch with others and news events. Do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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Social
media
 has become an integral part of the lives of most
people
, making it convenient for them to connect with others and know the
news
.
This
 trend brings many benefits,
although
 there are some problems that should be noted. Social
media
 provides a great platform to stay in touch with other
people
. By viewing others’ Facebook and Twitter,
people
 can keep up to date with the lives of their friends, families and co-workers, whereas before the advent of social
media
, those who lived in different cities easily lost contact. For business
people
, social
media
 is a great tool that helps them to find new customers and promote their products.   Social
media
 is
also
 an important source of
news
, more timely and flexible than traditional forms of
media
. Those who witness the
news
 event can post it online immediately and readers have easy access to the latest
news
 via their mobile phones.
In addition
 to that, web users can
also
 join the discussion about the
news
 event by making their comments to follow the post. Social
media
 gives readers more opportunities to express their opinions and share their ideas, with a greater degree of participation and interaction.
However
, the negative effects associated with social
media
 have
also
 drawn
people
’s attention. Unlike newspapers and TV, social
media
 does not have rigorous censorship. The result is that, in some cases, the
news
 turns out to be fake after it spreads widely on the web. As for social life, some
people
 have difficulty in face-to-face communication since they get used to online socializing. Their social skills decline rather than improve in real life.   Overall, social
media
 has more advantages than disadvantages, but we should
also
 be aware of its problems and try to address these problems.
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