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It is a good idea that students should take a gap year before going into higher education. How far do you agree with this opinion?

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Having a
gap
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year
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 is becoming more and more common among students after high school graduation. Whereas some
people
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 are in
favor
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 of
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 choice, others still feel concerned about its impacts.
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 there are a couple of certain disadvantages, I strongly believe that
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 a
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period
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 is beneficial indeed. On the one hand, taking one
year
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 off between high school and university may be negative to some extent.
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, some students may find it hard to come back to their
study
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.
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gap
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period
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 interrupts the continuity of their academic path, which may lead to their loss of learning habits and skills.
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, there are certain dangers facing those who wish to take a break from studying. Because most high school graduates are still young and immature in their way of thinking, they may easily be taken advantage of or unfortunately involved in some social evils.
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, the
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year
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 is positively considered by many
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 nowadays.
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period
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 allows adolescents to realize what they really want to do in the future. During
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 time, they have many chances to try their hands on different kinds of jobs.
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 is how they can explore themselves and get to know what their passions truly are.
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, a
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year
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 can
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 enable young
people
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 to enrich their life.
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, when devoting their time to some volunteer work, they are likely to meet many
people
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 from different walks of life. For those who decide to spend
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period
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 travelling around, their cultural experiences can be greatly built up as well. All in all, having a
year
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 off before university is more of a great choice.
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 decision may carry some risks and interrupt students’ education, it actually gives the young generation more valuable time to contemplate their future orientation and broaden their horizons in many ways.
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