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Scientists believe that computers will become more intelligent than human beings. Some people find it positive while others think it is a negative development. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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People have different views about the future impact of artificial
intelligence
. While some argue that developments in artificial
intelligence
 could bring about negative effects, I believe
this
 advance would have positive impacts on our lives in the near future. On the one hand, there are various reasons why people believe that artificial
intelligence
 may harm us if we are not well-prepared. From a general perspective, it can be argued that computers have become so intelligent that they make decisions without human oversight, and
therefore
, people would become deskill and lose their sense of purpose. On the societal level, there will be a rise in unemployment in various industries. One good illustration of
this
 is taxi drivers, bus drivers are replaced by self-driving vehicles, which would cause redundancies in driving jobs. Irrespective of
this
 argument, I believe that the increasing
intelligence
 of technology could bring some evident benefits. The main justification for believing
this
 is that computers could do many jobs better than humans. They are adept at various areas that require a high level of accuracy or calculating a large amount of data. A particularly good example here is surgical procedures carried out by robots that have greater precision than a human doctor.
Such
 technologies could reduce the likelihood of human errors and improve our quality of life. In conclusion,
although
 it might seem obvious that technology does harm to human life, I personally prefer that it brings advantages because intelligent machines will no doubt improve our lives in many ways. Given
this
 situation, it is recommended that we should make more progress in the field of artificial
intelligence
 as well as not ignore its potential risks.
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