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Some people believe that comic books are trash and they waste our children’s time and energy. What is your opinion?

#people #books #trash #waste #children’s #time #energy
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In the contemporary era, it is often argued that
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 is a negative that
children
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 ought to read relaxation
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 and it is a waste of time, whilst others disagree with that point of view. In my opinion, youngsters should not be restricted to
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 certain
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 of
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 because both
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pastime and educational
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 serve the purpose of imparting positive skills
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children
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. It is clear that,
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 and foremost, some parents think that
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 should be motivated to
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 educational
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, and it
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 adults age. They think that knowledge and useful information helps
children
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 with their studies and future progress.
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, academic
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 provide relevant and real information about the world which eventually enables
children
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 to explore the globe.
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, I have to admit that the role of serious
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 on kids’ intellectual growth is crucial and
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, undeniable.
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, many disagree and feel that
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, short stories and
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fiction
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not
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are not
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 only for fun. The stories and the incidents narrated in that
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books
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book
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provides
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 a vivid imagination and creativity for the minors.
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, juveniles know about helping weak people by reading
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Batman and Spiderman, know that being smart is cool by reading The Iron Man
comics
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.
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, some science
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 are very boring, and
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getting information throw
comics
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 on how CO2 converts to the O are boosting the interest of scholars to be educated and become voracious reader in the future.
Comics
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 are perfect to grasp ideas easily, whereas academic texts consist
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 plenty of technical terms. To conclude, while benefits of reading entertaining
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 helps to develop
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 mind, some still feel that only educational
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 are useful for
children
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’s intelligence and study skills.
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, as long as pastime
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not
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 considered to be a waste of time, vice versa as an addition to overall knowledge about the world, the benefits are clearly positive.
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