Young people who commit serious crimes, such as robbery or violent attacks should be punished in the same way as adults. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, the age of crime is getting younger and younger, especially teenagers.
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raises the question of whether the methods of re-education for juvenile delinquents are
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outdated and no longer deterrent. Some argue that the government should impose the same
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on teenagers as adults. In my opinion, I disagree with
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statement.  
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, most young people commit crimes due to impulsiveness and lack of thought. Adolescents are mentally unstable, easily agitated, do not know how to manage emotions and
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, which leads to criminal actions.
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, incidents of violence are most often caused by small frictions between friends or participating in theft to express themselves in a word of defiance.
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, it can be seen that
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who commit crimes are
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who lack attention from their families. A child may choose the most negative method of seeking parental attention through rebelliousness. Some
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believe that their more rebellious actions
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as fighting or stealing will attract more attention, and
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is more like a cry for help from the child than a criminal act.
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, applying
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as imprisonment or some other harsher method of
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will be counterproductive, the fragile nature of the child will be hurt, making the situation worse and
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to more severe consequences and uncontrollable
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.
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, if punishing minors as adults, in the case of a student being bullied by a peer by blaming the theft not only has great consequences for the entire family of the bullied student but
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causes inequality in society.  
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, applying the same fines could reduce the juvenile crime rate immediately. If the
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is not deterrent enough, it is easy for young people to feel fearless, continue to repeat, and from small mistakes can lead to bigger mistakes
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as drug trafficking, kidnapping, murder. . Meanwhile, severe
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will make
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think more carefully before doing and reduce recidivism, making society more stable. But in the end, heavy or light
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is not as important as self-awareness and self-correction,
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of severely punishing
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who commit crimes, they should educate them to understand that.   In conclusion, juvenile criminals should not be punished as adults. The law always has leniency and if acts of impulsiveness at a young age have to be paid with the future, that price is too expensive.
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