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‘Everybody should donate a fixed amount of their income to sup-port charity.’ How far do you share this viewpoint?

Helping
charity
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 is a controversial issue in contemporary culture, and it is often said that everyone has to contribute a certain amount of their earnings to help
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. For various reasons, it seems advisable that supporting
charity
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 is
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volunteer
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 and should not be obligated.
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,
people
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 on low incomes hardly can afford extra costs. For
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instance
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in-stance
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instance
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, in less affluent countries, the cost of day-to-day life is almost overwhelming for most
people
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 due to economic problems
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 as inflation.
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, providing that
people
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 had been able to
econo-mize
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economize
 small amount of their salary at the end of the month, they would have preferred to save it for a rainy day.
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, there are various methods for
people
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 to play a role in
charity
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 beyond donating money. These range from donating blood to voluntarily
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 needed
people
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.
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,
people
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 seeking
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volunteer
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 tasks could help in their area of expertise( as a teacher to teach youngsters, as a doctor to cure patients).
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, the donation could be valuable and
meaning-ful
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meaningful
 when
people
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 play a part spontaneously and with pleasure not as a rule or responsibility, which means donating is not a duty or mission to be completed but totally a
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 work. It is true that there are some
positives
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 aspects to force
people
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 to
do-nate
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donate
. Notably, it is crystal clear that as the number of supporters
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increases
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in-creases
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increases
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, the capacity of charities for facing and dwindling poverty augment.Regardless, helping the
charity
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 with
volunteer
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 spirit is priceless, and its worth won’t be equivalent to
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 so with an
obliga-tion
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obligation
. To conclude, having low incomes, availability of a wide range of
charity
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 works, and the importance of volunteering overcome the
do-nation’s
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donation's
donations
 obligation. It would appear that by forcing donors, the
na-ture
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nature
 of
charity
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 would be under question.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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