In a number of countries, some people think it is a necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Other believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

It is believed that
large
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amount of money should be spent on
construction
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of new railway lines.
However
, there are those who are sure that
this
money is needed to be spent on improving the existing
transport
. To my personal opinion, everything depends on the size of the
country
. To be precise, large
countries
indeed should invest in
connection
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the connection
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between the cities to reduce the time spent on travelling.
However
, smaller
countries
cound
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could
develop what they already have. Large
countries
,
such
as the Russian
Federadion
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Federation
or the USA, should provide decent investment into
development
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the development
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of the
transport
system between the regions within their borders. To provide a good example, travelling between the Moscow region and Khabarovsk can take many hours travelling even by plane, not
mentioning
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going by train, which easily takes days. Nowadays, when there are
lot
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of people who commute on regular basis and are ready to pay for quicker means of travelling, it is really reasonable to pay attention to the modern means of
transport
, which can provide an opportunity for faster travelling.
However
, it should be
also
mentioned that there are
countries
of a smaller size which probably do not need the same fast facilities for travellers.
For instance
, Belgium is
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quit
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a small
country
in comparison with
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neighbouring France or Germany. For
such
countries
as Belgium, it can probably be more interesting to invest
into
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the existing
transport
network making it more comfortable and pleasant for people to travel both within the cities and the
country
and going to the
countries
they share the border with. In conclusion, I would like to say that financial investment fully depends on the size of the
country
and the needs of the citizens.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • efficient
  • congestion
  • sustainable
  • environmentally friendly
  • connectivity
  • economic growth
  • public transportation
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