The internet has dramatically altered our lives over the past few decades. Altough some of these changes have been negative, the overall effect of this technology has been positive What are your opinion on this?

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The
internet
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has significantly changed our lives for the
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few years.
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alternations have been positive, the overall
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impact
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development has been negative. I personally think that
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internet
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is beneficial for us. There
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two primary
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which
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associated
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communicate
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and quality education. In
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I intend to discuss both views.
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of all, I completely
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believe
that the
internet
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is effective to communicate with our loved ones. Put more simply, the
internet
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connection is the easiest way to communicate with their loved ones.
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, we can save
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amount of money and time using the
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for our lives
everyday
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. One of the perfect examples of
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is that almost everyone in the world uses
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massanger
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messenger
to keep in touch with their loved ones every single minute.
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and even more
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importantly
though the
internet
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is efficient for getting
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education for people.
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is say
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that everyone is getting to develop for
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from
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access.
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many
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changes their routine which means before people must go to college but now we
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are just
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involes
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involves
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their online class so we just need to
internet
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and mobile devices.
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, nowadays everything
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that when people
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to study without professional tutors. So they just need to
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search
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Goolgle
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Google
, Youtube, Safari etc..
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whatever
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what ever
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do you want
also
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studied
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free with the
internet
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. By the way of conclusion, I once again restate my view that the
internet
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is useful for not only better communication but
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quality education.
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