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Countries around the world will be facing significant challenges relating not only to the environment, but population and education as well. What problems will your country face in the next ten years? How can these problems be overcome?

#countries #world #challenges #environment #population #education #country #face #ten #years
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Next
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 generation will face a
number
 of problems the way we are heading with the negligency of
pollution
 and the uncontrollable
populationss
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populations
population
.
However
, some countries not only face
this
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 two challenges but illiteracy will lead to poverty as well. A country can resolve
this
 with the proper precautions. The adverse effect of changing
environment
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 is a global problem. Accessive usage of modern technologies like diesel
car
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 has
incresed
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increased
an
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air
pollution
.
People
 started cutting more trees for the use of either furniture purpose or to make paper out of it, we disturb the nature. Without
trees
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 oxygen
level
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 went down and
ozon
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 level
also
 decreased due to electron rays produced by electronic devices which results in global warming. Apart from the common issues, a
number
 of countries
such
 as Asian countries are
also
 having increasing population and their education. Due to the fact that
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number
 of crowd, not everyone is able to afford to study and that leads to work for an average job and leads to the poverty. To overcome
above mentioned
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problmes
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problems
, the
governemnt
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government
 should encourage
the
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people
 to educate their kids. Education will
not
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 only beneficial for the individual person but for the whole nation. For the increasing population, there should be mandate rules to have
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number
 of children.
For
instance
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 China has
one child
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 policy to curb the population. The most important is
the
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pollution
, if we will not take care of it now, we will end up without oxygen. Government should ban
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plastic and precautions
like
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people
 opt for
pubic
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public
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 transport
instead
 of private vehicles to reduce the air
pollution
. Motivate
people
 to plant trees to make the environment better. In conclusion, by taking certain actions to prevent
predicatbles
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predictable
 issues we can make the future of
next generation
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 better.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Sustainability
  • Ecosystem
  • Renewable resources
  • Urbanization
  • Demographics
  • Healthcare system
  • Pension crisis
  • Curriculum development
  • Digital literacy
  • E-learning platforms
  • Lifelong learning
  • Public policy
  • Biodiversity conservation
  • Green technology
  • Population density
  • Generational equity
  • Economic disparity
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