In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?

One major difference that can be seen in different cultures all around the world is their behaviour with children during the uprising process. In many nations, people believe that they should perform a method that makes kids believe they are genuinely capable of
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everything that they want in life.
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attitude in the following paragraphs for finding its pros and cons,
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it will indicate the writer’s view in the end. On the one hand, we are witnessing kids who have heard positive speeches about their talents are much successful in the future.
For instance
, many children have been told from the very beginning that someday they will be stunning in a specific
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field. In these cases, offspring grow up with a winner mindset and
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the confidence of being number one in each stage of their life.
Thus
, if someone is told enough times that he or she is capable of turning almost everything in the future,
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it will come true because of the power of the belief.
On the other hand
, sometimes children are told something that cannot be done in any way.
For example
, what if a kid wants to be a superhero with the power of flying. Defiantly it is not moral to say
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boy that his desire is possible
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because we are sending him
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an impossible mission. In
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nature which is not possible at all.
Hence
, encouraging young ones to go for any target regardless of any obstacles could be much harmful than leaving them alone. All in all, while many parents tend to grow up their young kids with
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mindset about the future, I firmly believe
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is not a method that could be sure about its outcome. So, it is better to execute a more balanced method even if we want to rise a powerful generation.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • achieve
  • try hard
  • positive mindset
  • self-belief
  • motivates
  • ambitious goals
  • resilience
  • determination
  • confidence
  • self-esteem
  • growth mindset
  • unrealistic expectations
  • disappointment
  • failure
  • effort
  • hard work
  • seek support
  • individual differences
  • abilities
  • capabilities
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