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In some countries the difference in age between parents and children nowadays is greater than in the past, is this a positive or negative development.

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In
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 generation, people are becoming more self-aware and as
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, they want to figure out their lives
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 and understand themselves before venturing into raising a child.
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, the childbearing age is increased. I believe
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 is predominantly of advantage.
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, the major importance of the increased generational gap is financial stability.
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 is the ability to financially cater to the need of a child and
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 is mostly possible when both
parents
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 have figured out their career which in most cases allows them to earn more.
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, research has shown that as opposed to older
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 most young
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 struggle to provide for their wards as they are mostly uneducated and work menial jobs which equal minimal paychecks. To
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 end, a child may suffer due to poverty.
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, people who choose to have children later in their late twenties and early thirties are more mature.
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, maturity increases with experience
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, wider generational gaps allows the
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 of
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 generation to acquire more social, physical, emotional and intellectual maturity.
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 is good for the children as it enables them to become well-rounded individuals. In all these
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 raise independent and matured wards. To conclude, the increase in the age gap between children and their
parents
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 may continue in most countries because of its benefits. I think it is a primarily positive development as these
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 are more mature and are able to support their families better, financially. As
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, raising more mature offspring with greater opportunities in life.
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