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Band 6.5

Governments should spend more money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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There are many public facilities that government should spend
money
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 on like
roads
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 ,
railways
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 , parks and sports centres etc. It is undeniable that some
people
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 think the government should invest in
railways
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 to make the population's life more convenient but
roads
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 are important too. I personally disagree with
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 statement and
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 essay will show the reasons. To start with, spending on
railways
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 has some benefits.
For example
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 , it is an opportunity for whoever who do not have enough
money
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 to buy a
car
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 maybe he thinks it cannot
afford
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 and it is not a priority to buy at
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 time or he has other things to spend
money
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 with to
travel
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 easily without having a
car
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 and it will save a lot of
money
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 for buying a
car
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.
On the other hand
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 , nowadays we have many ways to
travel
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 from one place to another some
people
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 drive a
car
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 and maybe others
use
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 public transportation like a boat , train and bus. So not only
railways
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 are important but
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roads
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 because most
people
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 have their own
car
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 to
travel
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 with their family for a road trip or to send their child to school before going to work.
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, someone lives at a place which does not have an access to
use
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 public transportations so they have to
use
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 a
car
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instead
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.
Therefore
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 ,
roads
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 have some significant reasons that government should think about. In conclusion , investing in
railways
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 provides some advantages like helping
people
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 who do not have their own
car
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 to
travel
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 easily.
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 , I think spending on
roads
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 is
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 important too since a lot of
people
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 have their own
car
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 and must
use
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roads
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 to
travel
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.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Carbon emissions
  • Mass transportation
  • Traffic congestion
  • Economic growth
  • Regional development
  • Initial investment
  • Feasibility
  • Flexibility
  • Rural areas
  • Integration
  • Sustainable
  • Efficiency
  • Infrastructure
  • Commuters
  • Public expenditure
  • Autonomous vehicles
  • Long-term investment
  • Accessibility
  • Connectivity
  • Modal shift
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