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Governments should spend more money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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There are many public facilities that government should spend
money
 on like
roads
 ,
railways
 , parks and sports centres etc. It is undeniable that some
people
 think the government should invest in
railways
 to make the population's life more convenient but
roads
 are important too. I personally disagree with
this
 statement and
this
 essay will show the reasons. To start with, spending on
railways
also
 has some benefits.
For example
 , it is an opportunity for whoever who do not have enough
money
 to buy a
car
 maybe he thinks it cannot
afford
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 and it is not a priority to buy at
this
 time or he has other things to spend
money
 with to
travel
 easily without having a
car
 and it will save a lot of
money
 for buying a
car
.
On the other hand
 , nowadays we have many ways to
travel
 from one place to another some
people
 drive a
car
 and maybe others
use
 public transportation like a boat , train and bus. So not only
railways
 are important but
also
roads
 because most
people
 have their own
car
 to
travel
 with their family for a road trip or to send their child to school before going to work.
In addition
, someone lives at a place which does not have an access to
use
 public transportations so they have to
use
 a
car
instead
.
Therefore
 ,
roads
 have some significant reasons that government should think about. In conclusion , investing in
railways
 provides some advantages like helping
people
 who do not have their own
car
 to
travel
 easily.
However
 , I think spending on
roads
 is
also
 important too since a lot of
people
 have their own
car
 and must
use
roads
 to
travel
.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Carbon emissions
  • Mass transportation
  • Traffic congestion
  • Economic growth
  • Regional development
  • Initial investment
  • Feasibility
  • Flexibility
  • Rural areas
  • Integration
  • Sustainable
  • Efficiency
  • Infrastructure
  • Commuters
  • Public expenditure
  • Autonomous vehicles
  • Long-term investment
  • Accessibility
  • Connectivity
  • Modal shift
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