Modern children are suffering from the diseases that were once considered to only be meant for adults. Obesity is a major disease prevalent among children. What are its causes, and what solutions can be offered?

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The diseases
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as obesity that only meant to be for older folks earlier, in the contemporary era, youth are suffering from that.
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type of problem, followed by the solutions that include how education and increase exercise can erode
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. One major cause of
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fond of fast food which
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of unhealthy ingredients. In western countries,
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kind of food is full of fat and bad cholesterol which make youth obese
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very early ages. Another acknowledging cause behind
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is lifestyle changes. Comfort is becoming
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of today’s child. They do not like to play outside like football or cricket
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video games and play station games are more enjoyable to them, which make them fat. The best solution to
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problem is to educate
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at schools in form of subjects or seminars so that they should be aware
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consequences
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having unhygienic foods.
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, physical activities including games should be there in schools which help them in burning more calories. To demonstrate, the institutions with sports activities in them have students more fit and active than other schools. In conclusion, many
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put on too much weight due to bad food and lifestyles they are following,
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can solve by educating them and encourage them to take part in outdoor sports activities.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Obesity
  • Sedentary lifestyle
  • Prevalent
  • Genetic predisposition
  • Comfort eating
  • Screen time
  • Physical education
  • Nutritional education
  • Economic disparities
  • Food deserts
  • Subsidize
  • Advertising
  • Weight management
  • Junk food
  • Healthy food options
  • Physical activity
  • Body image
  • Counseling
  • Consumer education
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