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Many people believe that social networking sites like Facebook have had a negative impact on both individuals and society. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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With the advance of technology, a variety of websites were created to make
people
's lives easier and facilitate social exchange.
This
 essay will discuss the ups and downs of the phenomenon
that is
 the internet. At the same
time
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 these sites can be used to bring friends and family together, they can
also
 have a negative effect, caused by several factors, like fake news, harmful behaviour of their users and the wrong idea that life is perfect. Social media became very popular in the past years and with that new professions were created, influencers and content creators,
for instance
, are all over the internet with all sorts of interests.
People
 started to be totally influenced by their lifestyle, tips and purchases. They frequently show an irreal life, which can be triggering for the population that can't achieve the same.
Moreover
, social media has been a place where
people
 think they can comment whatever they want, sometimes being mean and disrespectful.
In addition
 to that, fake news started to become more common, due to the fact
that is
 easy to spread information on those websites.
On the other hand
, those online spaces are helpful to long-distance relationships and family and friends that live apart. They can always follow each other to see what is happening in their lives, see pictures of them, and be in touch whenever they want to. That being said, I agree that social networking sites have a negative effect, but I don't think that there are any positive sides. It can affect some
people
 and help others.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • erosion
  • face-to-face
  • interactions
  • privacy concerns
  • data breaches
  • misinformation
  • polarize
  • cyberbullying
  • online harassment
  • procrastination
  • productivity
  • social isolation
  • dissemination
  • breeding ground
  • vast amounts
  • personal information
  • mental health
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