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Some people believe that it is a good idea that older people continue to work if it is possible for them to do. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There is a controversial view about whether or not old adults should get a job. While some think
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 a negative effect, I believe the reinvigoration of the elderly is a positive phenomenon. On the one hand, many
people
 advocate that old
people
 should be off work and enjoy their retirement days for two principal reasons. In the contemporary world, employers might impose a heavy workload on their workers in order to generate profit, which is detrimental to elderly
people
’s health.
In other words
, if
people
 over 60 got a 9-to-5 job, they would have to clue to a computer all day or spend intensive working hours.
This
 hectic lifestyle would harm workers’ well-being, let alone the elderly.
Secondly
, in
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 family, child-minding might be a responsibility of the old
people
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 home.
On the other hand
, there are two reasons why the elderly should be encouraged to engage in today business.
Firstly
, many grandparents find themselves alienated from young generations. By immersing in the workforce,
this
 generation gap could be shortened,
thus
 there will be mutual understandings between family members.
Secondly
, the experience of old
people
 could help their employers gain a competitive over rivals. Those who have spent their entire life in an industrial sector would have had a good
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 of effective strategies, customer’s desire, and other management policies.
For example
, in many law organisations, retired lawyers take a backseat and work as consultants for their younger colleges. In conclusion,
although
 working for long hours would have an adverse impact on old adults’ life, I would argue that they should continue working at will for several reasons.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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