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University students are increasingly studying abroad as part of their studies. Do the advantages of studying abroad outweigh the disadvantages?

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There has been a rising trend amongst
students
 to pursue their education in foreign universities.
Although
students
 would struggle with cultural and linguistic challenges, they would gain significant life experiences, that would reward them later on in their careers. In my opinion, studying abroad has far fetched benefits, despite a few inevitable circumstances they may have to face. The greatest benefit of
students
 studying overseas is that
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 they will have unique personal experiences that will help them grow as individuals,which would not have been possible if they had studied in their own countries. Being in another country would require the
students
 to push themselves from the norm, enabling them to enrich their knowledge and experience.
For example
, when my sister studied in Italy, she would be put in situations that she had to continually adapt to. These unique encounters with life add layers to the
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 overall personality and for
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 it is essential that
students
 migrate abroad. The main difficulty that
students
 will face while abroad would stem from cultural and linguistic challenges. For many,communication with locals to get errands done would be an obstacle.
For instance
, my Pakistani friend while studying in Indonesia would at times make a fool of himself while trying to express his wants or thoughts effectively.
This
 barrier of language acts as a major disadvantage for
students
 who pursue studies overseas. Studying in a
foriegn
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foreign
 country has become incredibly common, while
students
 will no doubt will experience obstacles in the form of communication, it is in fact that these very hardships will lead to the main advantage of studying abroad
that is
 personal development.
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 bad days will lead to a lifetime of cherished memories abroad, which would be more advantageous than disadvantages.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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