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many people believe that social networking sites (such as facebook) have had a huge negative impact on both individual and society. To what extent do you agree or diagree?

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Social networking
sites
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, for ,instance
Facebook
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, are thought by some to have had a detrimental effect on individual
people
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 as well as
community
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 and local
communities
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.
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, while I believe
such
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sites
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 are mainly beneficial to the individual. I agree that they have had a damaging effect on local society. With regards to individuals, the impact that online social media has had on each individual person has clear advantages.
Firstly
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, folks from different countries are brought together through
such
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sites
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 as
Facebook
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 whereas ,before the development of technology and social networking
sites
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, masses rarely had the chance to meet or communicate with anyone outside of their immediate circle or
community
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.
Secondly
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,
Facebook
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also
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 has social groups which offer individuals a chance to meet and participate in discussions with
people
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 who share common interests.
On the other hand
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, the effect that
Facebook
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 and other social networking
sites
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 have had on societies and the local public can only be seen as negative. Rather than individual
people
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 taking part in their local
community
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, they are
instead
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 to take more interest in
people
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 online.
Consequently
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,the
people
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 within local
communities
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 are no longer forming close or supportive relationships.
Furthermore
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, civilization as a whole is becoming increasingly disjointed and fragmented as multitudes spend more time with
people
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 they have never met face to face and who they are unlikely to ever meet in the future. To conclude,
although
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 social networking
sites
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 have brought individuals closer together, they have not had the same impact on society or local
communities
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. Local
communities
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 should do more to try and involve local
people
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 in local activities in order to promote the future of
community
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 life.
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