Many children these days have an unhealthy lifestyle. Both schools and parents are equally responsible for solving this problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

During the very recent years , students have cultivated unhealthy and toxic habits.

However

, a vast majority of people argue that parents

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are inevitably in charge of tackling

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problem and I would include myself , as I firmly agree with

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I will be explaining my point of view.

To begin

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family

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the family

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has always been the child's

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environment to grow up , learn and explore.

For instance

, baby girls tend to

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imitate their mothers' behaviours and habits by trying their

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cloths

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on or even putting

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makeup because they perceive their parents as someone to look up to all the time ,

therefore

, it is undeniable fact that children are following their mothers and fathers' footprints.

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families are expected to be

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good role

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as their impact on youngsters is huge.

Secondly

, educational institutions are no exception for being accountable

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teaching the younger generations how to pick and build

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healthier habits.

For example

, the average student

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roughly about 5-7 hours on five consecutive days a week , which consolidated to be

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decent amount of time that can build or break a circle of routine. And for that

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the school environment must have a great influence on its pioneers just as much as parents do.

On the other hand

, some alleged that families should not be judged for their sons and daughters' type of lifestyle as they cannot fully control it , since they are affected by their colleagues and friends and only schools

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capable of taking the lead to correct the situation. Ultimately ,

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many people blame the educational environment and expect them to take care of

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dilemma all alone. I personally think that these two are evenly responsible and they all represent crucial factors in children's upbringing stage and they should lead them by example for a healthier community.