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Sportsman earns more money than other profession. Do you agree or disagree? Provide relevant examples if necessary.

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Sports have an immense effect on a human's daily life whether physical or mental. Sports is not a white-collar profession but if pursued rightly can bring many glories to the country and family. So, I tend to acknowledge that sportsmen are being high paid but only if they become
an official players
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an official player
official players
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. The
first
 point of view is that becoming a sportsman is every teenager's dream. Most of the time it vanishes when they enter practical life to pursue someone else's dream and choose other professions. Few of them fought hard to achieve their intention and become sportsmen. In
cricket
, if you get selected to represent your country worldwide administration pay you twice as any other white-collar job.
For example
, In the Pakistan
cricket
 team, official players, get their monthly salary whether they play
cricket
 or not.
Moreover
, they get to bring their two family members on any international tours.
In addition
 to
this
, football is another expensive sport. Footballer earns thrice more than any other profession it is because many billionaires invest their money in an international club which
then
 selects the local talents. The athlete contract varies from thousand to millions of dollars on the popularity and skills of the professional.
Moreover
, the budget of the club
also
 plays its role.
For example
, Ronaldo is the most expensive player. His contract is 64 million dollars a year and his net worth is going to cross one billion dollars. Bringing
this
 to an end, Sportsman earns more than other jobs but only that sports in which more money is invested like football, hockey,
cricket
 and many more.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
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  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
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  • To summarize
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