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Some people believe public libraries are not important for people, others disagree about this statement. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Many people have different opinions as to the
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importance
 of libraries. Some supposed that they are no longer relevant.
However
, some others affirmed that they still have a role to play.
This
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internet
 has made the visit to a library very unnecessary. It has become
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seamless
seems
 to retrieve any information you require from any online book store at the speed of light and as
such
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it in a long while.
This
 breakthrough in technology has saved many students time and money in looking for sources to
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.
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 did all my researches for my
last
 project online without having any reason to go to the library.
On the contrary
, despite the
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 of books and materials available on the web, it is
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 to support essays. These materials online cant be
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 to those in hardcopies on the bookshelves.
This
 has made the need for a library
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indispensable
.
In addition
, many believed that the libraries are still very relevant because it serves as a
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reservoir
 of knowledge. Books from great authors are stored and can be retrieved in
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original
 form. In conclusion,
although
 the internet has made access to information very easy and
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convenient
, physical libraries are still very relevant to the development of knowledge.
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