Many museums charge for admission while others are free. Do you think the advantages of charging people for admission to museums outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Charging with entrance
tickets
in
museums
has enjoyed increasing popularity in recent years. From my perspective, it has both positive and negative sides in equal measure. Payment for
tickets
when tourists go to
museums
can be deemed disadvantageous for some reasons. The most obvious drawback is that many
museums
are not
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budgets to survive for
long-term
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period. If
museums
are not belong
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to governments or international associations, they will not receive funding from policymakers as well as revenues from
travelers
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in order to pay for upgrade facilities or spend for
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a salary
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salary
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of
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.
This
can lead to degradation of facilities or employees leaving
museums
to look for other jobs bring more benefits. Another pitfall is that entrance passes of
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can lose a number of
visitors
, who have demand go to
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a building
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to understand about historical sites or historical figures though they can not stand for
fee
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a fee
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of
tickets
.
Instead
of
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entrance, it helps people of all walks of
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to get a chance to explore useful knowledge about
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and history of
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. Despite these aforementioned disadvantages, some significant advantages of selling
tickets
to
visitors
in
museums
do exist. The most prominent benefit is that
gallery
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will receive
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amount of profit in order to upgrade facilities as well as improve better customer services with the aim is attract
visitors
. If
museums
offer high product qualities and good services,
visitors
are ready
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for
this
expenditure any at
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.
That is
why famous artists contribute their products in celebrity galleries. Another compelling point is that sense of security to
museums
at a certain cost.
This
is because some
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or thief will take advantage
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opportunity to enter
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some items, which
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in exhibits to show for
visitors
admiring. To sum up, my firm conviction is
that is
detrimental for its tight
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budget and loss
visitors
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, but it can be a useful distance and safety for building very as well.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Admission fee
  • Revenue stream
  • Maintenance
  • Overcrowding
  • Commercialization
  • Cultural heritage
  • Diverse attendance
  • Community ownership
  • Access to culture
  • Visitor experience
  • Exhibit quality
  • Cultural mission
  • Reliance on funding
  • Government subsidies
  • Cultural accessibility
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