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the best way to ensure the growth of the children is to make parents take parenting courses. Do you agree or disagree?

#growth #children #parents #courses
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Bringing up the siblings has become one of the most conspicuous topics in the twenty-
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 century. Some individuals argue that
parents
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 are able to raise their offspring better as long as they are trained. I completely agree with
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 issue.
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, attending class would bring loads of benefits for fathers and mothers, because they can acquire lots of new know-how which is related to their main job which is parenting. It is no secret that these types of
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 instil fresh ideas in their mind ,and in
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, their knowledge would become updated.
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, by taking place some
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 for young people in Sudan, before getting married, they are able to know their children better from mental and physical aspects, so they can control children's attitude better than previous.
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, these kinds of
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 possess another implication,
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 have become familiar with these courses and they are able to share their knowledge with each other. Due to these facts, they manage to teach each other. It is no secret that each couple has his or her own culture and each family has its own social background,
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 in
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,
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 can become knowledgeable. To make it more clear, most people say that people who come from the north of Iran behave kindly with their children and it is not a good
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 but
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 method has its own proses.
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, participating in
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, forcing
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 to follow a special rule and in
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way
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,
parents
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 will exploit the same idea to bring up their offsprings, in
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 ,
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 there would be a multitude kid of ideas with the same attitude and it has devastating effects on societies. It is highlighted that
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 siblings are societies' backbone and they play a significant role in
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 issue. In conclusion, attending class would bring loads of merits for fathers and mothers and its advantages outweigh its disadvantages.
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, I deeply agree with
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 issue.
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