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Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation. why might this be the case? what could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

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Which is important,
work
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 in a
company
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 or be a self-employed
person
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?
To begin
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 with. some people want to be self-employed
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person
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, rather than to
work
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 in a
company
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 or
organisation
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. For, instance, when a
person
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 is graduating from a university, he or she needs to have a
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,
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 that
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 has two ways in his or her life.
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, establish a new
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 or
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 based on his or her inner personality and ability.
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,
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 in an industrial
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 or a government
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, when a
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 wants to be self-employed in future, he or she needs enormous money to start new
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 or
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. So it will be difficult for everyone.
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, there are numerous advantages and disadvantages for self-employing or
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work
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 in an
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, if a
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work
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 in a majority
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, he or she can get different
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 from other people who are working in that
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. But in my opinion, if a
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 starts a
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 on his or her feet,
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 he or she can achieve newest
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. Different
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 arise from our routine daily life and some other
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 stem from our inner abilities.
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, people can choose to be self-employed or
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 in an
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, it depends on their personality and their features. To conclude
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 essay, I would say if I have numerous money, I prefer to establish a new start-up and be an entrepreneur in my life.
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-employment
  • freelancing
  • entrepreneurship
  • autonomy
  • financial stability
  • work-life balance
  • financial insecurity
  • lack of support
  • resources
  • long working hours
  • uncertain income
  • job security
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