In some countries, young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.

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the
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or getting a job soon after
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is the way to go while others opined that
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education
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arguments
. On the one hand, getting a paid job at an early
age
affords one the opportunity of learning the basics of life
such
as financial intelligence and team building. Since these skills are not thought in schools, the
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at a very young
age
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understanding at an early
age
, it makes mastery easier.
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world
's most prudent managers
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school
. they learnt and honed their skills at an early
age
by listening to the masters.
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, seeing the
world
at an early
age
gives one a good grasp of the culture and tradition of other people.
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in life.
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could spell doom for anyone.
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, you can become too comfortable with making money and as
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forget to go back to complete your formal
education
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boys who started earning money at an early
age
often find it difficult to go back to
school
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in their families,
hence
there is no need for them to
further
the schooling anymore.
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when they left high
school
, it is possible for them to be exploited and
this
will derail their
education
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your
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
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  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural immersion
  • Life experience
  • Work ethic
  • Career readiness
  • Self-discovery
  • Delayed gratification
  • Intellectual stagnation
  • Financial implications
  • Social dynamics
  • Academic trajectory
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