Many people think cheaper air travel should be encouraged because it gives ordinary people to travel further. However, others think this leads to environmental problems, so air travel should be more expansive in order to discourage people to have it. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

With
the
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advanced
technology
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people
have easier
transportation
opportunuties
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opportunities
. The more
people
start to
use
air
travel
the more discounts seem to be made.
Air
travel
provides
a great deal of
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a lot of
many
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benefits for everyone who wants to
travel
,
on the other hand
, it poses
serious
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threat
for
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the environment. To prevent
this
some
people
are of the opinion that
air
travel
should discourage
people
so that their facilities won't grow rapidly ,while some advocate the
opponent
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idea. I reckon that if we can
use
air
transportation
appropriately we may alleviate its detrimental effects.
First
and foremost, I agree with the argument that due to
the
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its
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available price more
people
tend to utilize
air
travel
and
this
situation is a force to be reckoned with. Due to the shortage of money
people
especially
living
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in underdeveloped and developing countries , struggle to find
travel
opportunities. If prices stay low
people
can put aside
adequate
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amount of money and will have a chance to
use
their
transportation
budget in foreign countries.
This
is problematic phenomenon does not only help
travelers
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travellers
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also
enable
people
who
lives
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live
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far away from their hometowns or families
such
as students. With a range of cheap
tickets
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every
people
can obtain access to visit new places or their countries.
On the other hand
, airports occupy so many areas and these areas are not empty fields. Due to the
constructing
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of these facilities forestry fields are abused,
this
situation
both
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adversely
effects
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affects
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on
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animals and plants.
For instance
, after the built of Istanbul Airport it showed up
this
field was playing a vital role in
migration
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the migration
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of birds. We can see so many
similiar
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similar
occasions like that so if we don't take crucial precautions we will cause more problems in the future. Another drawback of
air
travel
is the energy it uses. Even though the new novelties, Majority of the
transportation
vehicles are working with unrenewable energy
such
as petrol.
Such
energies do a great deal of harm to
environment
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the environment
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since
its
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wastes cant be
appeared
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easily, when we
use
these limited energies we put ourselves in a dire state and pose serious challenges in the long term. In light of the facts recounted above,
air
travel
can be both advantageous and disadvantageous. it
enable
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people
to
travel
with
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at
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cheap prices, but
by
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improving rapidly become a threat
for
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to
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nature. To alleviate its damage governments should choose unoccupied areas to build airports.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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