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In many countries, paying for things using mobile phone apps becoming increasingly common. Does this development have more advantages or more disadvantages.

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 development of IT solutions, there
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 rise in digital platforms. Due to
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these recent
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 many countries have commonly started paying using mobile
phone
 apps.
Such
 development has created ease of doing
bussiness
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business
. The advantages weighed are profoundly quite higher than the disadvantages. One major advantage of
this
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 usage of mobile
phone
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phones
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 is enhanced digital literacy amongst the users. At the same time, the
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business
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 has become much
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easier and everything is at a
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 away making
transations
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transactions
 and business grow faster.
In addition
 to
this
, there is
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financial
 transparency through proper banking channels.
This
 has
reduce
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depedency
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dependency
 on
redudant
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redundant
 systems making money move faster. The usage of mobile phones for paying has not only enabled access to
larger
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 pool of services but has grown
bussiness
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business
 for all ranging from small to large
enterprise
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enterprises
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. Most importantly, the digital
patforms
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platforms
platform
 has
also
 reduced corruption bringing in taxable
income
 for the development of the country at large. While looking at the disadvantage, it will be difficult for the poor citizens to pay using phones who
lacks
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 bank
linakges
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linkages
 and those who do not have a formal source of
income
. The drawback for
such
 people shall be less or no knowledge on digital literacy or access to
such
 high
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phone
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phones
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. In
turn
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this
 shall affect their
bussiness
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business
 and may result
is
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 loss of
income
.
However
, they can be provided support through ease of access to do
bussiness
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business
 and building their capacities to
such
 digital platforms. Another concern is
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increased
cyber crimes
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cybercrimes
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. Lately with
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 in
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the usage
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 of phones for payments, there
have
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 been
upsurge
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 in fraud or online theft.
This
 with an
advance
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 security gateway engine and capacity building can be addressed. On a
brigther
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brighter
 side, the payments using
phone
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the phone
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 in many countries have increased which have helped grow the countries
income
. Taking back learnings from other
failure
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 or challenges the disadvantages could be rectified.
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