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Some people think that it is more beneficial to take part in sports which are played in teams like football, while other people thinuk that taking part in individual Sports like Tennis Or swimming is better .discuss both view and give your opinion.

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When it comes to
sport
 there
is
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 two different points of view, some believe
that is
 more rewarding to be in teams ,
for example
, football and basketball, while others prefer individual
sport
 like running and swimming. In my ,opinion
sport
 is a form of therapy for
people
 and ,
,
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personally
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 I always enjoy doing
sport
 by myself. Referring to the
people
 who prefer
team
 sports, they are looking more into the competition, and teamwork to achieve a specific goal, and to achieve it. A
team
 needs a leader to organise and motivate players,
also
 the most important is to make them all work hard for the group and not for the individual plan,
such
 as a football
team
 working hard to compete with another group because they have a dream to achieve, they must work in collaboration which each other or they will not be able to get to their goal.
On the other hand
, some
people
 tend to support individual
sport
,
also
 they have a purpose to reach but its individual. Some work hard to coach and motivate themselves and others prefer to have a trainer to help them reach their aim, swimming is an example of an individual
sport
 where the person practice by focusing only on themself and their own objectives. In conclusion, some
people
 enjoy
team
 play and others like an individual
sport
. In both cases, the
sport
 remains very important to everyone, not only for the physical factor but
also
 the mental one.
People
 should practice any kind of
sport
 at least 3 times a week.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cooperation
  • Camaraderie
  • Teamwork
  • Shared responsibility
  • Personal goals
  • Individual glory
  • Self-reliance
  • Flexibility
  • Well-rounded
  • Athlete
  • Personal preference
  • Participation
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