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When new towns are planned,it is important to build more public parks or sports facilities than shopping centres. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

#towns #parks #sports #facilities #centres
It has been claimed that while
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planning
 for a new residential area the main concern has to be establishing green public areas and leisure facilities rather than constructing new shopping
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.s To me , I totally agree with the conception that shopping malls are far less important to be built up than parks and recreational
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, what people mostly need these days is an environmentally friendly
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, with a reliable source of fresh air and oxygen , and
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 trees and sky open green lands are providing, not the dull, box-like
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 blocks of trading
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 that block the sun and fresh air. A lush of trees in
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 sky open area is absolutely a healthy place for our children to play not that crowded indoor and poorly ventilated electronic games lounge in
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trading
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, it has been noticed recently that the average weight of population has increased to reach
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 unprecedented level and
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 phenomenon is assumingly a result of lack of
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physical
excersise
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exercise
 and of the sedentary lifestyle noticed in most countries,
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 the governments in concerned countries have to place legislations to boost the number of gym facilities in order to encourage more people to start working out to maintain a good physical and mental health which can not be secured by opining more shopping malls. To sum up, in the era of global warming , air pollution, and the rising of obesity as
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universal outbreak, I believe that all residential areas should have more public gardens and recreational lounges rather than opening extra shopping
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