There are social, medical and technical problems associated with the use of mobile phones. Do you agree that the problems outweigh the benefits of the mobile phone?
Nowadays, many
people
use Add an article
a smartphone
the smartphone
smartphone
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smartphones
in
worldwide. There are some issues which are social, medical and technical to utilize Change preposition
apply
phone
. As for me, there are more benefits than drawbacks.
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the phone
To begin
with, it is evident that it can communicate people
who stay in Change preposition
with people
far
place. To illustrate, when the best friend Add an article
a far
go
to stay in Change the verb form
goes
other country
, they can talk to use Change the wording
another country
other countries
the
application Correct article usage
apply
such
as Instagram, Facebook and line. In addition
, they are able to search on the internet immediately what food or medicine have
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has
positive
effect on their body. Add an article
a positive
For example
, when they have sickness, they are able to research what kind of disease they receive, and they realize what sort of pills should purchase. Thus
, they are possible to cure their bad condition without hospitalization. Furthermore
, thanks to technology development, they can do a lot of things whenever and wherever they want. Recently, people
tend to work in their house
using Fix the agreement mistake
houses
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the phone
phone
because of Fix the agreement mistake
phones
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a pandemic
the pandemic
pandemic
. Fix the agreement mistake
pandemics
This
trend will be new
normal working method in the future.
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a new
On the other hand
, using mobile
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a mobile
phone
has some negative aspects. Fix the agreement mistake
phones
First
of all, it can lead their poor eyesight. This
is because this
device always expose
blue light which is bad for their eye. According to the research, individuals’ eyesight was worse than Change the verb form
exposes
before
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a before
the before
released
technological Correct article usage
the released
phone
. Fix the agreement mistake
phones
Additionally
, people
might be less likely to do face-to-face communication. For instance
, people
used to communicate with their friends or colleges in
online, when they meet directly, they might feel Change preposition
apply
hesitate
and less to talk.
To sum up, I agree with Replace the word
hesitant
people
use
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using
mobile
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the mobile
a mobile
phone
which has more positive Fix the agreement mistake
phones
aspect
than Fix the agreement mistake
aspects
negative
. Because they can talk with Correct pronoun usage
onesnegative
people
who live in
far from their area, deal with health problems and do their Change preposition
apply
favorite
activities and job.Change the spelling
favourite
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