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Some people think that more money should be spent on protecting endangered species while others think it is a waste of valuable money. What is your opinion?

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There is no gain-saying that the society is polarized into two groups whether the
money
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 should be spent on
species
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 which are in a danger or not?
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 the protection of
animals
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 is necessary to balance an eco-cycle, some countries can not afford these expenses due to low economies. In my opinion, I believe that to save biodiversity,
species
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 need to be saved. Undoubtedly, there is not merely
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 but a basketful of causative reasons why endangered
species
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 need protection, out of which, the most prominent
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 is that each plays a vital role in the environmental cycle. To put it
in other words
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, depletion of
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 can impact various lives by which calamities can occur.
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, In forest Carnivores depends on herbivores for their survival. If herbivores get depleted
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 carnivores can attack humans for their food.
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, the extinction of
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species
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 can impact detrimentally on the lives of others which can imbalance the whole biodiversity. Having said that when it comes to the opponents
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 the countries who are not capable to provide basic things
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 as shelter, education and food to their people, consider spending
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 on
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 as wastage. The nations, that come under the poverty line are not developed and lack basic amenities for their people by which they can not afford expenses of
animals
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 and their protection. To substantiate it, India is a perfect epitome here where the government do not have a lot of budget for wildlife.
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, they use their
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 to upgrade the lifestyle of human beings and education rather than saving wild
animals
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. To conclude, there would be no exaggeration to state that both viewpoints have their own ramifications. Even though the extinction of
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need
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 to be stopped to conserve the environment;
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 some regions do not have sufficient
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 to be spent on the preservation of some lives.
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, I reckon that the elimination of certain
animals
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 may cause destruction in the food chain.

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