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Illiteracy continues to be a concern for many countries in the world today. What are the causes of illiteracy in the modern world, and what effects does it have on the people concerned and on society as a whole?

#illiteracy #concern #countries #world #effects #people #society
Constantly-evolving number of
illiteracy
 appears to be a worldwide concern in our contemporary
time
. There seem to be two main causes
on
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 the modern world, and a number of effects on concerned
people
 and on
society
, which in
this
 essay will be discussed. Certifiably, the main reason
of
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continuously
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illiteracy
 is
lack
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the lack
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 of financial support. The ever-rising number of kids dropping out of school
is become
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 much enormous, which side effects are not unnotable anymore.
Rumor
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 has it 60% of students aren’t able to follow their dreams through schools in
this
 modern age no longer
due to
this
 shortage.
This
 absence results in no fine education, which brings about
this
 much concern and burden on many countries. A
further
 well-known cause of
illiteracy
 is
new
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 generation of media.
This
 long-term impact of media on
people
 especially youngsters
make
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 them
as
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 unknown member of another beautiful made-up unreal world, which let their
time
to
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be wasted.
This
 whole new modern generation
feed
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 from
this
 peer’s
time
 and energy so far that they have no more neither motivation to live
nor
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or
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 learn.
Consequences
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 of
illiteracy
has
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widely-damaged
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on
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not only
people
 but
society
 as well. The undersupply of knowledge undermines
power
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 to supply
family
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families
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 financially in
this
modernity
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time
. Since big companies looking for well-known
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employers
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employer
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 it’s going to be very much difficult for these
people
 to find a proper job to get financially supplied.
On the other
hand
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 lack of fine staff in
society
 is being raised.
Moreover
, the second essential effect could be rejection
form
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society
.
In
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 the most recent occasion, not only most
organization
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organizations
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 but
people
 of
society
 as well attend to be in touch with persons, who are in a stable or well social position so they could help or develop themselves, which in
this
 case illiterate
people
 are being left out. Over a period of
time
, that cause
a
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huge class differences, which make it for them even impossible to break
this
 difference. In conclusion, lack of finance and addicted
using
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 of media seem to be the main causes of
illiteracy
, and being not able to supply family financially and being left out of
the
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society
 appear to
be effects
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 in
this
 case.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Literacy
  • Illiteracy
  • Poverty
  • Access
  • Educational resources
  • Social inequality
  • Discrimination
  • Gender disparity
  • Racial bias
  • Cultural norms
  • Technological advances
  • Political instability
  • Disruption
  • Education systems
  • Socioeconomic status
  • Job prospects
  • Health implications
  • Self-esteem
  • Empowerment
  • Economic growth
  • Social cohesion
  • Civic participation
  • Democratic processes
  • Exclusion
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